tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3266585209346965737.post8503981161301376276..comments2023-05-27T03:43:39.257-07:00Comments on cracks in my mind: suicide seatxhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09510438554332908439noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3266585209346965737.post-64475442791101682011-07-10T06:03:41.113-07:002011-07-10T06:03:41.113-07:00intense lines~
"no, living is my victory, th...intense lines~<br /><br />"no, living is my victory, the hammer to the nails, in the lid<br />of your coffin, wishing it <br />was your head."<br /><br />i love the twist to the funeral - it was her celebration, her freedom ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3266585209346965737.post-39872952300892503382010-12-29T14:25:43.323-08:002010-12-29T14:25:43.323-08:00this one needs to be continued friend, very deep,m...this one needs to be continued friend, very deep,moving....darkAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3266585209346965737.post-82401541763971469062010-09-26T12:27:55.800-07:002010-09-26T12:27:55.800-07:00I very much liked this piece... Nice visuals... ...I very much liked this piece... Nice visuals... Nice anger...Not For Jellyfishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08168569867944572358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3266585209346965737.post-45322079724484489542010-09-25T23:13:30.681-07:002010-09-25T23:13:30.681-07:00even though it's short, i really like this pie...even though it's short, i really like this piece's supercharged feel....and the image of crushed lily petals is quite haunting. agree with julie, this is a chimera of prose and poetryAmanda Summerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00942636545948440422noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3266585209346965737.post-53002048674436658772010-09-22T19:46:45.596-07:002010-09-22T19:46:45.596-07:00Interesting piece. "...the trigger whispers c...Interesting piece. "...the trigger whispers comfort to my finger for a heartbeat" reached out and grabbed me!Tess Kincaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04889725786678984293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3266585209346965737.post-74373053961511129032010-09-20T21:00:54.717-07:002010-09-20T21:00:54.717-07:00This is a nice continuation of the story. I felt t...This is a nice continuation of the story. I felt the anger in the narration, and because of <i>Silence. lies. broken.</i>, I shared it. Good job.PattiKenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3266585209346965737.post-80748793003904482402010-09-20T20:10:31.423-07:002010-09-20T20:10:31.423-07:00You use whitespace superbly! This is an engrossing...You use whitespace superbly! This is an engrossing mix of poetry and prose. Istruggled with the petals on the floor rather than the earth, until I realised he wasn't lowered down yet.<br /><br />I struggle with how the protagonist feels an inevitabiiity about following suit. The lack of personal growth from generation to generation, but see it all around me.<br /><br />I like this.Juliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09513648613788716017noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3266585209346965737.post-8272990038148327572010-09-20T17:17:00.876-07:002010-09-20T17:17:00.876-07:00There are a handful of moments in this that are, l...There are a handful of moments in this that are, like, "Pow!"<br /><br />Keep that mind cracking. This is an intriguing place.JeffScapehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00190641629175438603noreply@blogger.com