~4~
In the beginning, we nestle
BIG BANG
& the distance between us is
measured in eons, ever in-
creasing---
sun
son
springs
into existence
en plein air
in sane heir
in the jungle, the mighty jungle
the lion...the lying...sleeps tonight
Chapter 4 - for 10DOM's River.
Okay, I'll reserve judgement since the entire story isn't finished, but (on its own) this lost me. I get the unknown child bit, but it's a huge departure from the previous chapters.
ReplyDeleteThat stated, I'm wondering if you just gave up, since there are no more posts. Given your clear prolific ability, I can only assume that's the case. If I'm wrong, let me know.
As I told some of the others, finish this. Stylistically, it has an intriguing uniqueness which is enjoyable.
Oh, I wish you would have written more!
ReplyDeletehmmm--that's it?
ReplyDeletei did like the first two, but i guess you ran out of time to make something of this...
maybe there'll be more?
(queue the baby sound of crying very loudly)... disappointed, that's all? -j
ReplyDeleteyeah i had more planned and did not make it...will probably continue..
ReplyDeleteAnd you did not finish this, why? Ugh... Was quite enjoyable, like schizophrenic internal brain banter.
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