Sunday, February 13, 2011

10DOM-ROM: Chapter 4 - En Plein Air

~4~

In the beginning, we nestle

BIG BANG

& the distance between us is
measured in eons, ever in-
creasing---

sun
son
springs
into existence

en plein air
in sane heir

in the jungle, the mighty jungle
the lion...the lying...sleeps tonight

Chapter 4 - for 10DOM's River.

6 comments:

  1. Okay, I'll reserve judgement since the entire story isn't finished, but (on its own) this lost me. I get the unknown child bit, but it's a huge departure from the previous chapters.

    That stated, I'm wondering if you just gave up, since there are no more posts. Given your clear prolific ability, I can only assume that's the case. If I'm wrong, let me know.

    As I told some of the others, finish this. Stylistically, it has an intriguing uniqueness which is enjoyable.

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  2. Oh, I wish you would have written more!

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  3. hmmm--that's it?

    i did like the first two, but i guess you ran out of time to make something of this...

    maybe there'll be more?

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  4. (queue the baby sound of crying very loudly)... disappointed, that's all? -j

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  5. yeah i had more planned and did not make it...will probably continue..

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  6. And you did not finish this, why? Ugh... Was quite enjoyable, like schizophrenic internal brain banter.

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